Day 11 of NaPoWriMo 2013 and today’s prompt is to write a ‘Tanka’. This, like the “American” cinquain, is a poem based on syllables, with the pattern being 5-7-5-7-7. They work best when those final two 7-syllable lines contain a sort of turn or surprise that the first three lines might not wholly anticipate. You can string a bunch of them together to make a multi stanza poem, or just write one!
The example they give us is from the Japanese, translated by Kenneth Rexroth:
On Komochi Mountain,
from the time the young leaves sprout,
until they turn red,
I think I would like to sleep with you.
What do you think of that?
Now personally I think the last line is of 6 syllables not 7. Let me know what you think.
But I digress. Here is my Tanka.
Foggy Country lane
Bare moisture laden
Muddy overgrown copse
Last spadeful hid your sad grave
I’d bid you a last goodbye
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